2019年6月·第3套英语四级写作 · 题目、范文与解析
本页是 2019年6月英语四级真题第3套 写作 的写作真题页（四六级短文写作）—— 与试卷排版同一卷面：完整写作要求（Directions，词数要求 120–180 词）连续排印 ，卷面下方直接给出参考范文（148 词）与整篇中译、逐段拆解，另附审题立意、谋篇句架与评分自检 。
写作题和范文
本页写作题面、参考范文与逐段解析由懒笔记基于2019年6月·第3套 英语四级写作原卷整理。与试卷排版同一卷面：完整写作要求（Directions，含主题、文体、词数与署名约束）连续排印。写作是生产性任务、无 ABCD 标准答案——题面即整道题；卷面下方直接给出满足全部硬约束的参考范文、整篇中译与逐段拆解。
【参考范文 · 148 词】写作无唯一标准答案，以下为达标示范
Students Bring Warmth to Elderly Neighbors Last Saturday morning, the Student Union of our university organized a volunteer activity to help elderly people living in the nearby community. More than thirty student volunteers took part in the event, which was held at the Sunshine Nursing Home.
During the activity, the volunteers were divided into several groups. Some cleaned the rooms and tidied the gardens, while others chatted with the elderly, performed songs and taught them how to use smartphones. A few students even brought homemade food and gifts to share.
The activity received warm praise from both the elderly and the community. Many old people said they felt cared for and less lonely, and the volunteers also gained a deeper understanding of social responsibility.
This meaningful event not only brings joy to the elderly but also encourages more students to devote themselves to voluntary work in the future.
【参考译文】
学生给社区老人送温暖 上周六上午，我校学生会组织了一场志愿活动，帮助住在附近社区的老人。三十多名学生志愿者参加了这次活动，活动在阳光敬老院举行。
活动中，志愿者们分成了几组。有人打扫房间、整理花园，有人陪老人聊天、表演歌曲、教他们使用智能手机。还有几名同学带来了自制的食物和礼物，分享给老人。
这次活动获得了老人和社区的一致好评。许多老人说他们感到被关心、不再孤单，志愿者们也加深了对社会责任的理解。
这场有意义的活动不仅给老人们带来了快乐，也鼓励更多同学在未来投身于志愿服务。
【第 1 段】标题加导语落地。标题 Students Bring Warmth to Elderly Neighbors 用名词短语概括事件；导语 Last Saturday morning, the Student Union… organized a volunteer activity 一句答全何时、何人、何事，which was held at the Sunshine Nursing Home 补齐地点与规模，落实了‘导语一句话答全5W’。
【第 2 段】分组动作落地。先用 the volunteers were divided into several groups 总起，再用 Some cleaned…, while others chatted… performed… taught… 并列铺开具体动作，A few students even brought… 递进补亮点，全段过去时，落实了‘分组罗列具体动作’。
【第 3 段】反响引言落地。received warm praise from both the elderly and the community 客观交代好评，Many old people said they felt cared for and less lonely 借老人之口写效果，the volunteers also gained… 补参与者收获，落实了‘用反响引言写效果’。
【第 4 段】意义升华落地。结尾 This meaningful event not only brings joy to the elderly but also encourages more students to… 用 not only…but also… 双重升华，时态转一般现在时表普遍价值，落实了‘结尾升华点意义’。
这道题到底要写什么、立意是什么
动笔前先钉死本题的核心写作任务与读者语域 ，再定中心立意与要展开的要点 —— 这些是本题特有的内容判断，不是通用套路。
报道校园敬老志愿活动
任务动词是 write，宾语是 a news report，报道内容锁死为 a volunteer activity organized by your Student Union，目的是 to assist elderly people in the neighborhood。一句话钉死：写一篇新闻报道，客观叙述学生会组织的、帮助社区老人的这场志愿活动。注意是‘报道一件已发生的事’，不是发表你的看法。
校报读者第三人称客观
题面写明投给 your campus newspaper，读者是全校师生，所以要用新闻体：第三人称、客观陈述、语气正式简明，不写‘我觉得’‘我们玩得很开心’这类主观抒情。给一个标题、正文像记者转述事实，语域就对了。
客观报道一场敬老活动的全过程与意义
本篇不是议论，中心是把 a volunteer activity organized by your Student Union 这件事讲清楚讲完整：谁在何时何地做了什么、怎么做的、有什么反响和意义。让读者读完这一篇就掌握这场活动的全貌。
- 导语概括活动本身 开门见山点出学生会组织了一场帮助社区老人的志愿活动——即 a volunteer activity organized by your Student Union，把最核心的事实放最前。
- 交代时间地点人员 补齐基本要素：活动在哪天、哪个地点（如社区/敬老院）举行，多少名志愿者参加，让报道有可信的时空坐标。
- 说明志愿者做了什么 具体展开志愿者如何 assist elderly people in the neighborhood：打扫房间、陪老人聊天、表演节目、教用智能手机等，用动作把过程写实。
- 点明意义与反响 收尾交代活动效果：老人的反应、社区的评价、志愿者的收获，以及这场活动倡导的敬老风尚，让报道有落点、不单薄。
怎么分段、每段写什么、能套哪些句架
按写作家族给出现成的段落框架（每段承担什么功能），并为每段配可直接套用的 功能句架（留出填本题内容的空位）。段序与上方参考范文一一对应。
- 第 1 段 标题加导语 先拟一个概括性标题，再用一两句导语答全 5W：何时何地，学生会组织了怎样一场帮助社区老人的活动，多少人参加。
- 第 2 段 活动具体过程 分点铺开志愿者具体做了哪些事、活动如何开展，用一般过去时把过程写实。
- 第 3 段 反响与收获 交代活动的反响：老人的感受、社区的评价、志愿者自身的收获。
- 第 4 段 意义升华与号召 用一句话点出活动的价值、倡导敬老风尚或号召更多同学参与，让报道有落点。
落到本题：标题点出‘学生给社区老人送温暖’；导语交代‘上周六上午，本校学生会组织了一场帮助社区老人的志愿活动，三十多名志愿者参加，地点在附近的敬老院’，一句话覆盖 a volunteer activity organized by your Student Union 与 to assist elderly people in the neighborhood。
- 时间开头点事件 Last/On + 时间, the ___ organized a volunteer activity to help ___.（把时间、组织者、活动目的一句说清）
- 补充规模与地点 More than ___ volunteers took part in the event, which was held at ___.（用 which 从句补参与人数和地点，避免另起短句）
本段写志愿者如何 assist elderly people in the neighborhood：有人打扫房间、整理花园，有人陪老人聊天、表演歌曲、教他们使用智能手机，还有人带来自制食物和礼物，把‘怎么帮’写实。
- 总起分组 During the activity, the volunteers were divided into several groups.（先总说分工，给下文并列做铺垫）
- 并列不同动作 Some ___, while others ___.（用 Some…while others… 把两拨人做的两件事并列，句式紧凑不流水账）
- 递进补充亮点 A few even ___ to ___.（用 even 递进补一个加分细节，让过程更丰满）
本段写反响：活动持续约三小时，获得老人和社区的好评；许多老人说感到被关心、不再孤单；志愿者也加深了对社会责任的理解，呼应‘点明意义或反响’这一要点。
- 引出好评 The activity received warm praise from ___.（用 received praise from 客观交代反响来源）
- 转述当事人感受 Many ___ said they felt ___.（借 said they felt 转述老人的真实反应，体现效果）
- 补志愿者收获 The volunteers also gained ___.（用 also gained 补一句参与者的成长，双向体现意义）
本段收尾升华：这场有意义的活动不仅给社区老人带来了快乐，也鼓励更多同学在未来投身志愿服务，点出敬老的社会价值，让报道有号召力的收束。
- 双重意义升华 This meaningful event not only ___ but also encouraged more ___ to ___.（用 not only…but also… 一句同时点出对受助者和对参与者的双重意义）
本题在四个评分维度怎样算达标、容易在哪丢分
按阅卷四维（内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式）给出本题达标要点，并把最容易踩的低分写法摆出来 + 给改法 —— 这是写作版的「狠拆诱人错项」。
- 内容切题 四要素都要落到句子 本题要写的是 a volunteer activity organized by your Student Union 且目的为 to assist elderly people in the neighborhood，核对时确认导语点了活动、正文有时间地点人员、有具体动作、有意义反响，四块缺一即扣分。
- 结构连贯 导语前置过渡衔接 本范文按标题＋导语→过程→反响→意义四段推进，段首用 During the activity、This meaningful event 等标记衔接；自查时确认没有把细节抢在导语前面。
- 语言准确 过程过去意义现在 本范文过程段全用过去时（took part、were divided、performed），结尾意义句转现在时（brings、encourages）；自查时逐个谓语对照，别让已发生的动作用了现在时。
- 字数格式 达标区间加新闻格式 本题要求 You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words，自查时确认词数落在这个上下限内；同时确认有标题、通篇第三人称客观叙述、不是书信或议论文。
- 第一人称抒情 反面：‘I was so happy that day! We had a great time helping the old people and I will never forget it.’——满是‘I/we’的主观抒情，丢了新闻的客观性。改成：‘The volunteers spent a meaningful morning helping the elderly, and the old people were deeply moved.’ 用第三人称转述事实。
- 开头就堆细节 反面：‘At 8 a.m. we gathered at the school gate and took a bus for half an hour…’——一上来就是流程细节，读者读完还不知道这是什么活动。改成先写导语：‘Last Saturday, the Student Union organized a volunteer activity to help elderly people in the community.’ 再展开细节。
- 已发生用现在时 反面：‘The volunteers clean the rooms and chat with the old people.’——活动已结束却用现在时。改成：‘The volunteers cleaned the rooms and chatted with the old people.’ 用一般过去时叙述。
- 流水账无落点 反面：结尾停在‘Then we cleaned the yard and went home at noon.’——只报流程不点意义。改成：‘This activity not only brought warmth to the elderly but also encouraged more students to join voluntary work.’ 补上意义与号召。
常见问题
围绕本题的写作题目与要求、作文类型、立意要点、参考范文、谋篇分段与评分丢分，逐条给出可核对的答案。
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- 按内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式四维评分，本题达标要点：内容切题——本题要写的是 a volunteer activity organized by your Student Union 且目的为 to assist elderly people in the neighborhood，核对时确认导语点了活动、正文有时间地点人员、有具体动作、有意义反响，四块缺一即扣分；结构连贯——本范文按标题＋导语→过程→反响→意义四段推进，段首用 During the activity、This meaningful event 等标记衔接；自查时确认没有把细节抢在导语前面；语言准确——本范文过程段全用过去时（took part、were divided、performed），结尾意义句转现在时（brings、encourages）；自查时逐个谓语对照，别让已发生的动作用了现在时；字数格式——本题要求 You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words，自查时确认词数落在这个上下限内；同时确认有标题、通篇第三人称客观叙述、不是书信或议论文。 典型低分写法（须避免）：反面：‘I was so happy that day! We had a great time helping the old people and I will never forget it.’——满是‘I/we’的主观抒情，丢了新闻的客观性。改成：‘The volunteers spent a meaningful morning helping the elderly, and the old people were deeply moved.’ 用第三人称转述事实；反面：‘At 8 a.m. we gathered at the school gate and took a bus for half an hour…’——一上来就是流程细节，读者读完还不知道这是什么活动。改成先写导语：‘Last Saturday, the Student Union organized a volunteer activity to help elderly people in the community.’ 再展开细节；反面：‘The volunteers clean the rooms and chat with the old people.’——活动已结束却用现在时。改成：‘The volunteers cleaned the rooms and chatted with the old people.’ 用一般过去时叙述；反面：结尾停在‘Then we cleaned the yard and went home at noon.’——只报流程不点意义。改成：‘This activity not only brought warmth to the elderly but also encouraged more students to join voluntary work.’ 补上意义与号召。