2021年12月·第1套英语四级写作 · 题目、范文与解析
本页是 2021年12月英语四级真题第1套 写作 的写作真题页(四六级短文写作)—— 与试卷排版同一卷面:完整写作要求(Directions,词数要求 120–180 词)连续排印 ,卷面下方直接给出参考范文(171 词)与整篇中译、逐段拆解,另附审题立意、谋篇句架与评分自检 。
写作题和范文
本页写作题面、参考范文与逐段解析由懒笔记基于2021年12月·第1套 英语四级写作原卷整理。与试卷排版同一卷面:完整写作要求(Directions,含主题、文体、词数与署名约束)连续排印。写作是生产性任务、无 ABCD 标准答案——题面即整道题;卷面下方直接给出满足全部硬约束的参考范文、整篇中译与逐段拆解。
【参考范文 · 171 词】写作无唯一标准答案,以下为达标示范
A Proposal for the Freshmen Orientation Program Our school is planning an orientation program for this year's freshmen, and its main arrangements are proposed below. The program aims to help new students adapt to the new environment and academic studies as smoothly and quickly as possible.
In terms of duration, the program will last for one week, starting from the day of registration. As for the participants, it is open to all incoming freshmen, and it will be organized by the Student Union together with volunteer seniors and several advisers from each department.
A variety of activities will be arranged during the week. First, campus tours and library workshops will help newcomers find their way around. Second, group meetings with academic advisers will introduce course selection and effective study methods. Finally, evening social parties will give students a chance to make new friends and relax.
We are confident that this program will give every freshman a warm and confident start. Your approval and support would be highly appreciated. The Student Union
【参考译文】
新生入学适应方案 本校正为今年的新生筹办一个入学适应项目,主要安排如下。该项目旨在帮助新生尽可能顺利、迅速地适应新环境与学业。
在时长方面,项目为期一周,从报到当天开始。在参与者方面,项目面向全体新生,由学生会联合高年级志愿者和各院系的若干名顾问共同组织。
这一周将安排多种活动。第一,校园导览和图书馆工作坊帮助新生熟悉校园;第二,与学业顾问的小组见面会介绍选课与有效的学习方法;最后,晚间的社交派对让同学们结交新朋友、放松身心。
我们相信这个项目会让每位新生拥有一个温暖而自信的开始。恳请校方批准并给予支持。 学生会
【第 1 段】标题+主旨句落地。本段用标题 A Proposal for the Freshmen Orientation Program 点题,开头句 our school is planning ... arrangements are proposed below 总起,再用 The program aims to help new students adapt ... 把 aim 前置,正是『开头一句亮方案主旨』方法的落地。
【第 2 段】两标签领出两要点。In terms of duration 领出『one week, starting from the day of registration』写死时长,As for the participants 领出『all incoming freshmen』『organized by the Student Union ...』写清人员,一句一要点,覆盖 duration 与 participants。
【第 3 段】First/Second/Finally 写实活动。先用 A variety of activities will be arranged 总起,再以 First / Second / Finally 分列三类活动,且每条都补了作用(help newcomers find their way around、introduce course selection、make new friends),实现『分点罗列活动』且不空泛。
【第 4 段】信心+请求+组织落款。We are confident that ... a warm and confident start 表信心并回扣目的,Your approval and support would be highly appreciated 客气请求批准,末行以 The Student Union 落款,避免出现真名。
这道题到底要写什么、立意是什么
动笔前先钉死本题的核心写作任务与读者语域 ,再定中心立意与要展开的要点 —— 这些是本题特有的内容判断,不是通用套路。
写一份新生入学适应方案
本题要写的是 write a proposal,并且要求已经把必写框架给死:which may include its aim, duration, participants and activities。所以本篇的核心任务不是论证入学适应有多重要,而是拿出一套包含目的、时长、参与者、活动四块的可执行安排。
面向校方的正式方案口吻
题目设定是 organizing an orientation program 的校方情境,这份 write a proposal 是提交给学校审阅的,读者是校方而非同学,所以要用正式、得体的书面语,语气客气而有条理;落款用组织身份(如学生会)而不是个人真名,既贴合校方文书口吻,也符合四级不署真名的惯例。
一套帮新生尽快适应的可执行方案
全篇要达成的交际目的:向校方提交一套安排,用来 help the freshmen adapt to the new environment and academic studies,让新生尽快融入校园与学业。这句是全篇的主心骨,四个要点都围着它转。
- 目的:助新生适应环境与学业 对应要点 aim:写清方案的目的是帮助新生适应新环境与学业,即 help the freshmen adapt to the new environment and academic studies。
- 时长:为期一周 对应要点 duration:给出项目持续多久,本篇定为入学报到起的一周,让安排显得具体可落地。
- 参与者:全体新生+组织方 对应要点 participants:说清面向哪些人(全体新生)以及由谁组织(学生会、高年级志愿者与各院系顾问),把 its aim, duration, participants and activities 里的 participants 一项写实。
- 活动:三类具体安排 对应要点 activities:给出可执行的具体活动——校园导览与图书馆工作坊、选课与学习方法指导会、晚间社交派对,避免只说『开展一些活动』这类空话。
怎么分段、每段写什么、能套哪些句架
按写作家族给出现成的段落框架(每段承担什么功能),并为每段配可直接套用的 功能句架(留出填本题内容的空位)。段序与上方参考范文一一对应。
- 第 1 段 标题+主旨句点目的 拟标题表明这是新生入学方案,开头一句总起并点明方案目的(aim),即 help the freshmen adapt to the new environment and academic studies。
- 第 2 段 交代时长与参与者 一段之内讲清 duration(为期多久)与 participants(面向谁、由谁组织)两个要点。
- 第 3 段 分点铺开活动 单独成段,用 First / Second / Finally 分点列出具体活动(activities),把安排写实。
- 第 4 段 礼貌收尾+落款 表达信心、请求校方批准与支持,末尾以组织身份落款。
标题表明这是新生入学方案,开头总起后点明目的是帮新生尽快适应,呼应 help the freshmen adapt to the new environment and academic studies。
- 亮明方案主旨 To help ___, our school proposes ___, and the main arrangements are outlined below.(空位填『帮谁做什么』与『提出的方案名』)
- 点明目的 The program aims to help ___ as ___ as possible.(空位填服务对象与目标状态,专门承接 aim 这一要点)
时长定为入学报到起的一周(duration),参与者为全体新生、由学生会联合高年级志愿者与各院系顾问组织(participants),落实 its aim, duration, participants and activities 中的两项。
- 交代时长 In terms of duration, the program will last for ___, starting from ___.(空位填时长与起始时间)
- 交代参与者 As for the participants, it is open to ___, and it will be organized by ___.(空位填面向对象与组织方)
落实要点 activities:校园导览与图书馆工作坊帮新生熟悉环境、与学业顾问的会面指导选课与学习方法、晚间社交派对帮新生交友,三类活动分别对应适应环境与学业两条线。
- 总起活动 A variety of activities will be arranged during ___.(空位填时段,引出后面的分点)
- 分点+点功能 First, ___ will help ___; second, ___ will introduce ___; finally, ___ will give students a chance to ___.(每个空位填一个活动及其作用)
表达方案将帮每位新生顺利起步的信心,回扣 help the freshmen adapt to the new environment and academic studies,请求校方批准支持,落款用组织身份而非真名。
- 表达信心回扣目的 We are confident that ___ will ___.(空位填方案名与预期效果,收束时呼应开头的目的)
- 礼貌请求批准 Your approval and support would be highly appreciated.(固定客气收尾句,适用于各类提交给上级/校方的方案)
本题在四个评分维度怎样算达标、容易在哪丢分
按阅卷四维(内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式)给出本题达标要点,并把最容易踩的低分写法摆出来 + 给改法 —— 这是写作版的「狠拆诱人错项」。
- 内容切题 四要点必须全覆盖 本题必写 its aim, duration, participants and activities 四项,缺一即扣内容分;范文里目的、一周、全体新生+学生会、三类活动各有明确落点,四项齐全。
- 结构连贯 标题+四段+序号词 本篇用标题起、四段推进、活动段用 First/Second/Finally,结构一目了然;自查时确认每段只承担明确任务、无跳跃。
- 语言准确 将来时表安排+句式简洁 范文介绍安排统一用 will last / will be arranged / will help,时态一致;多用目的与建议句式(aims to help、is open to),句子结构稳,不堆砌复杂从句。
- 字数格式 落区间+方案格式齐 本题要求 You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words,是硬性上下限,两头都不能碰;同时要具备方案该有的标题、分段与落款,缺格式也丢分。
- 空谈重要性无安排 反面示例:Adapting to a new environment is very important for every freshman, so we should pay great attention to it.(通篇这种感慨,没有时长、人员、活动)。改法:直接写 The program will last for one week and offer campus tours, study workshops and social parties for all freshmen. 用可执行安排替掉空泛感慨。
- 活动笼统无细节 反面示例:We will organize many interesting and colorful activities for the freshmen.(说了等于没说)。改法:We will arrange campus tours, library workshops and group meetings with academic advisers to help freshmen settle in. 把活动名和用途都写出来。
- 只写活动漏时长人员 反面示例:只有一大段活动描述,全文找不到项目持续多久、面向谁。改法:补一句 The one-week program is open to all incoming freshmen and organized by the Student Union. 一句同时补齐 duration 与 participants 两项。
- 落款暴露真名 反面示例:末尾写 Yours, Li Ming(暴露姓名,且口吻偏私信)。改法:落款改为 The Student Union,既符合考试要求,也贴合提交校方的正式方案口吻。
常见问题
围绕本题的写作题目与要求、作文类型、立意要点、参考范文、谋篇分段与评分丢分,逐条给出可核对的答案。
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- 2021年12月英语四级真题第1套 写作(写一份新生入学适应方案)这篇作文怎么分段、每段写什么?
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- 按内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式四维评分,本题达标要点:内容切题——本题必写 its aim, duration, participants and activities 四项,缺一即扣内容分;范文里目的、一周、全体新生+学生会、三类活动各有明确落点,四项齐全;结构连贯——本篇用标题起、四段推进、活动段用 First/Second/Finally,结构一目了然;自查时确认每段只承担明确任务、无跳跃;语言准确——范文介绍安排统一用 will last / will be arranged / will help,时态一致;多用目的与建议句式(aims to help、is open to),句子结构稳,不堆砌复杂从句;字数格式——本题要求 You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words,是硬性上下限,两头都不能碰;同时要具备方案该有的标题、分段与落款,缺格式也丢分。 典型低分写法(须避免):反面示例:Adapting to a new environment is very important for every freshman, so we should pay great attention to it.(通篇这种感慨,没有时长、人员、活动)。改法:直接写 The program will last for one week and offer campus tours, study workshops and social parties for all freshmen. 用可执行安排替掉空泛感慨;反面示例:We will organize many interesting and colorful activities for the freshmen.(说了等于没说)。改法:We will arrange campus tours, library workshops and group meetings with academic advisers to help freshmen settle in. 把活动名和用途都写出来;反面示例:只有一大段活动描述,全文找不到项目持续多久、面向谁。改法:补一句 The one-week program is open to all incoming freshmen and organized by the Student Union. 一句同时补齐 duration 与 participants 两项;反面示例:末尾写 Yours, Li Ming(暴露姓名,且口吻偏私信)。改法:落款改为 The Student Union,既符合考试要求,也贴合提交校方的正式方案口吻。