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2021年12月·第3套英语四级写作 · 题目、范文与解析

本页是 2021年12月英语四级真题第3套 写作 的写作真题页(四六级短文写作)—— 与试卷排版同一卷面:完整写作要求(Directions,词数要求 120–180 词)连续排印 ,卷面下方直接给出参考范文(154 词)与整篇中译、逐段拆解,另附审题立意、谋篇句架与评分自检 。

PROMPT & MODEL ESSAY · 写作题和范文

写作题和范文

本页写作题面、参考范文与逐段解析由懒笔记基于2021年12月·第3套 英语四级写作原卷整理。与试卷排版同一卷面:完整写作要求(Directions,含主题、文体、词数与署名约束)连续排印。写作是生产性任务、无 ABCD 标准答案——题面即整道题;卷面下方直接给出满足全部硬约束的参考范文、整篇中译与逐段拆解。

真题卷第3套(2021-12) • 四级
Part I
Directions: Suppose you have just participated in a school project of collecting used books on campus. You are now to write a report about the project, which may include its aim, organizers, participants and activities. You will have 30 minutes to write the report. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

【参考范文 · 154 词】写作无唯一标准答案,以下为达标示范

A Report on the Used-Book Collection Last week, a book-collecting project was successfully carried out on our campus, aiming to give idle used books a second life and to help students in need. By gathering textbooks and novels that lay unused on shelves, the project hoped to promote recycling and ease the burden of buying new books.

The project was organized by the Student Union, with strong support from the school library. It attracted a wide range of participants: undergraduates from every department, several teachers, and a group of enthusiastic volunteers. Together they set up donation booths, sorted and classified the collected books, and recorded each contribution carefully. Some volunteers also repaired damaged covers and delivered the books to a nearby rural school.

Thanks to everyone's effort, more than two thousand books were collected. The activity not only enriched the campus reading atmosphere but also spread the spirit of sharing and thrift among students.

【参考译文】

一份关于旧书回收活动的报告 上周,我校成功开展了一次收书活动,旨在让闲置的旧书获得第二次生命,并帮助有需要的同学。通过收集那些搁在书架上无人使用的教材和小说,本项目希望推动回收利用,减轻购买新书的负担。

本次项目由学生会组织,并得到学校图书馆的大力支持。它吸引了各类参与者:来自各院系的本科生、几位老师,以及一群热心的志愿者。大家一起设立募捐点,对收来的书籍进行分类整理,并认真登记每一笔捐赠。一些志愿者还修补了破损的书皮,把书送到附近的一所乡村学校。

多亏了大家的努力,共收到了两千多册图书。这次活动不仅丰富了校园的阅读氛围,也在同学们中间传播了分享与节约的精神。

【第 1 段】总览开场并带出目的。"Last week, a book-collecting project was successfully carried out on our campus" 用一句话交代时间、地点与事件,随后 "aiming to give idle used books a second life and to help students in need" 用分词短语接出目的,落实了首段"先总览后点目的"的方法与 aim 要点。

【第 2 段】分点写清组织者参与者活动。"was organized by the Student Union" 被动交代组织者,冒号后 "undergraduates... several teachers, and a group of... volunteers" 列举参与者,"set up... sorted and classified... and recorded..." 三个过去式动词并列铺开活动,一段之内把三个要点全部对上。

【第 3 段】成果加意义收束。"more than two thousand books were collected" 给出可感知的成果,"not only enriched... but also spread..." 把意义升一层收尾,呼应首段目的,符合"结尾亮成果收意义"的蓝图。

ANALYSIS · 审题与立意

这道题到底要写什么、立意是什么

动笔前先钉死本题的核心写作任务与读者语域 ,再定中心立意与要展开的要点 —— 这些是本题特有的内容判断,不是通用套路。

核心任务

写一份校园旧书回收项目报告

一句话钉死任务:就 collecting used books on campus 这件事,write a report about the project。也就是写一篇报告,把这次校园旧书回收项目讲清楚,而不是写倡议书、写读后感或写议论文。

读者 · 语域

面向阅卷人的正式报告语气

报告没有具体收信人,读者就是阅卷老师和校方,所以通篇用第三人称、客观书面语,多用被动和正式表达(如 was organized by)。题目要的是 write a report about the project,不是书信,因此不要出现 Dear、问候、署名,也不要 I think / I hope 式的第一人称抒情。

中心立意

客观交代旧书回收项目全貌

本篇的交际目的:把这次 collecting used books on campus 的项目,从目的、组织者、参与者到活动客观地报告清楚,让没参加过的人读完就明白"发生了什么、有什么意义"。

要展开的要点
  1. 目的:让旧书循环、帮到人 对应 its aim, organizers, participants and activities 里的 aim——让闲置旧书获得第二次生命、帮助有需要的同学、同时推动环保与节约。这是首段要带出的项目意义。
  2. 组织者:学生会牵头 对应清单里的 organizers——由学生会发起组织,并得到学校图书馆的支持。一句话交代"谁办的",避免这个最常被漏的点。
  3. 参与者:师生与志愿者 对应 participants——各院系本科生、部分老师,以及一批热心志愿者,说明参与面广。
  4. 活动:设点、分类、募集 对应 activities——设立募捐点、分类整理登记收来的书、修补破损书籍,并把书送到附近的乡村学校。这是报告主体最实的部分。
STRUCTURE · 谋篇与逐段

怎么分段、每段写什么、能套哪些句架

按写作家族给出现成的段落框架(每段承担什么功能),并为每段配可直接套用的 功能句架(留出填本题内容的空位)。段序与上方参考范文一一对应。

  1. 第 1 段
    标题+总览+目的 标题点题;首段一句话交代时间地点与"项目已办成",再顺势说出 its aim, organizers, participants and activities 中的 aim(为什么办)。
  2. 第 2 段
    组织者+参与者+活动 报告主体,集中写清 organizers(谁办的)、participants(谁参加)、activities(做了哪些具体的事)三个要点。
  3. 第 3 段
    成效与意义收尾 用一句成果(如收书数量)加一句意义收束全文,呼应开头的目的。
第 1 段 上周校园办成旧书回收,目的在循环与助人

写"上周在校园里成功开展了一次旧书回收项目",然后接目的:让闲置旧书获得第二次生命、帮助有需要的同学、推动回收与节约。落实 its aim, organizers, participants and activities 中的 aim。

  • 事件总览开场 Last week, a ______ project was successfully carried out on our campus,(横线填活动名,一句交代时间地点与事件)
  • 分词短语补出目的 aiming to ______ and to ______(两个横线各填一个目的,把 why 接在总览后面)
第 2 段 学生会办、师生志愿者参加、设点分类募集

organizers:学生会组织、图书馆支持;participants:各院系本科生、部分老师和一批志愿者;activities:设募捐点、分类整理、逐笔登记,还有志愿者修补破书并送往乡村学校。

  • 被动交代组织者 The project was organized by ______, with strong support from ______.(横线填发起方与支持方,用被动显客观)
  • 冒号列举参与者 It attracted a wide range of participants: ______, ______ and ______.(冒号后并列三类人)
  • 并列动词铺陈活动 Together they ______, ______, and ______.(三个过去式动词并列,把做过的事一次讲清)
第 3 段 收书逾两千册,营造书香又传递分享节约

一句成果:一周内收到两千多册书;一句意义:既丰富了校园阅读氛围,又在同学中传播了分享与节约的精神。

  • 点出成果 Thanks to everyone's effort, ______ were collected.(横线填成果数量,用一句可量化的结果收束)
  • 递进升华意义 The activity not only ______ but also ______.(not only...but also... 把意义推高一层)
REVIEW · 自检避坑

本题在四个评分维度怎样算达标、容易在哪丢分

按阅卷四维(内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式)给出本题达标要点,并把最容易踩的低分写法摆出来 + 给改法 —— 这是写作版的「狠拆诱人错项」。

  • 内容切题
    四要点全写且不跑题 本题达标要点是 its aim, organizers, participants and activities 四项都要写到、且都是客观事实;最易失分是漏掉 organizers(谁办的)或 aim(为什么办)。
  • 结构连贯
    三段分明、过渡自然 首段总览、中段三要点、末段成效,层次清楚;段内用 Together / Thanks to 衔接,读者能顺着逻辑走下来。
  • 语言准确
    过去时为主、善用被动 collected、organized、set up、recorded 等已发生动作统一过去时;组织者用 was organized by 被动,语气更正式客观,是本题语言上的加分点也是失分高发区。
  • 字数格式
    报告体到位、词数达标 须是报告而非书信/议论文,并把词数控制在 You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words 规定的范围内,低于下限或超出上限都会被扣分。
典型低分写法 · 反面示例与改法
  • 只写活动漏掉组织者与目的 反面示例:通篇只讲"我们收了很多书、分类整理",既没说谁发起,也没说为什么办。修正:补上 "The project was organized by the Student Union to give used books a second life and help students in need."
  • 开头写成呼吁式书信 反面示例:"Dear friends, I sincerely call on everyone to donate your old books!" 这是倡议信不是报告。修正:"Last week, a book-collecting project was successfully carried out on our campus."
  • 已发生的活动误用现在时 反面示例:"The project is organized by the Student Union and students donate many books." 事情已发生却用现在时。修正:"The project was organized by the Student Union, and students donated many books."
  • 空洞万能句注水 反面示例:"With the development of society, more and more people pay attention to books." 与项目无关的套话。修正:"More than two thousand books were collected in only one week."
FAQ · 关于本篇的常见问题

常见问题

围绕本题的写作题目与要求、作文类型、立意要点、参考范文、谋篇分段与评分丢分,逐条给出可核对的答案。

2021年12月英语四级真题第3套 写作的写作题目是什么?要求写多少字?
2021年12月英语四级真题第3套 写作(Part I)的写作要求为:Suppose you have just participated in a school project of collecting used books on campus. You are now to write a report about the project, which may include its aim, organizers, participants and activities. You will have 30 minutes to write the report. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words. 本题要求120–180 词。
2021年12月英语四级真题第3套 写作属于哪种类型的作文、有什么格式要求?
2021年12月英语四级真题第3套 写作 是四六级短文写作(议论 / 应用文 / 报告等短文)。写作要求120–180 词。
2021年12月英语四级真题第3套 写作(写一份校园旧书回收项目报告)应该怎么立意、写哪几个要点?
2021年12月英语四级真题第3套 写作的中心立意是本篇的交际目的:把这次 collecting used books on campus 的项目,从目的、组织者、参与者到活动客观地报告清楚,让没参加过的人读完就明白"发生了什么、有什么意义"。可展开的要点:对应 its aim, organizers, participants and activities 里的 aim——让闲置旧书获得第二次生命、帮助有需要的同学、同时推动环保与节约。这是首段要带出的项目意义;对应清单里的 organizers——由学生会发起组织,并得到学校图书馆的支持。一句话交代"谁办的",避免这个最常被漏的点;对应 participants——各院系本科生、部分老师,以及一批热心志愿者,说明参与面广;对应 activities——设立募捐点、分类整理登记收来的书、修补破损书籍,并把书送到附近的乡村学校。这是报告主体最实的部分。
2021年12月英语四级真题第3套 写作(写一份校园旧书回收项目报告)的参考范文是怎样的?多少词?
2021年12月英语四级真题第3套 写作的参考范文(154 词):A Report on the Used-Book Collection Last week, a book-collecting project was successfully carried out on our campus, aiming to give idle used books a second life and to help students in need. By gathering textbooks and novels that lay unused on shelves, the project hoped to promote recycling and ease the burden of buying new books. The project was organized by the Student Union, with strong support from the school library. It attracted a wide range of participants: undergraduates from every department, several teachers, and a group of enthusiastic volunteers. Together they set up donation booths, sorted and classified the collected books, and recorded each contribution carefully. Some volunteers also repaired damaged covers and delivered the books to a nearby rural school. Thanks to everyone's effort, more than two thousand books were collected. The activity not only enriched the campus reading atmosphere but also spread the spirit of sharing and thrift among students.
2021年12月英语四级真题第3套 写作(写一份校园旧书回收项目报告)这篇作文怎么分段、每段写什么?
2021年12月英语四级真题第3套 写作的参考范文共 3 段:第 1 段(标题+总览+目的)标题点题;首段一句话交代时间地点与"项目已办成",再顺势说出 its aim, organizers, participants and activities 中的 aim(为什么办);第 2 段(组织者+参与者+活动)报告主体,集中写清 organizers(谁办的)、participants(谁参加)、activities(做了哪些具体的事)三个要点;第 3 段(成效与意义收尾)用一句成果(如收书数量)加一句意义收束全文,呼应开头的目的。
2021年12月英语四级真题第3套 写作(写一份校园旧书回收项目报告)作文容易在哪丢分?
按内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式四维评分,本题达标要点:内容切题——本题达标要点是 its aim, organizers, participants and activities 四项都要写到、且都是客观事实;最易失分是漏掉 organizers(谁办的)或 aim(为什么办);结构连贯——首段总览、中段三要点、末段成效,层次清楚;段内用 Together / Thanks to 衔接,读者能顺着逻辑走下来;语言准确——collected、organized、set up、recorded 等已发生动作统一过去时;组织者用 was organized by 被动,语气更正式客观,是本题语言上的加分点也是失分高发区;字数格式——须是报告而非书信/议论文,并把词数控制在 You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words 规定的范围内,低于下限或超出上限都会被扣分。 典型低分写法(须避免):反面示例:通篇只讲"我们收了很多书、分类整理",既没说谁发起,也没说为什么办。修正:补上 "The project was organized by the Student Union to give used books a second life and help students in need.";反面示例:"Dear friends, I sincerely call on everyone to donate your old books!" 这是倡议信不是报告。修正:"Last week, a book-collecting project was successfully carried out on our campus.";反面示例:"The project is organized by the Student Union and students donate many books." 事情已发生却用现在时。修正:"The project was organized by the Student Union, and students donated many books.";反面示例:"With the development of society, more and more people pay attention to books." 与项目无关的套话。修正:"More than two thousand books were collected in only one week."。

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