EXAM · 来自 英语四级写作 · 2024 年 12 月 · 第 1 套 · Part I

2024年12月·第1套英语四级写作 · 题目、范文与解析

本页是 2024年12月英语四级真题第1套 写作 的写作真题页(四六级短文写作)—— 与试卷排版同一卷面:完整写作要求(Directions,词数要求 120–180 词)连续排印 ,卷面下方直接给出参考范文(161 词)与整篇中译、逐段拆解,另附审题立意、谋篇句架与评分自检 。

PROMPT & MODEL ESSAY · 写作题和范文

写作题和范文

本页写作题面、参考范文与逐段解析由懒笔记基于2024年12月·第1套 英语四级写作原卷整理。与试卷排版同一卷面:完整写作要求(Directions,含主题、文体、词数与署名约束)连续排印。写作是生产性任务、无 ABCD 标准答案——题面即整道题;卷面下方直接给出满足全部硬约束的参考范文、整篇中译与逐段拆解。

真题卷第1套(2024-12) • 英语四级
Part I
Directions: Suppose the business school of your university is conducting a survey to collect students' opinions on the express delivery service industry in China. You are to write a response about its recent development and its impact on people's lives. You will have 30 minutes to write the essay. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

【参考范文 · 161 词】写作无唯一标准答案,以下为达标示范

As a student invited to share my views in this survey, I am glad to comment on the express delivery industry in China, which has grown at an astonishing pace in recent years.

To begin with, the recent development of this industry is remarkable. Delivery networks now reach even remote villages, and parcels that once took a week can be delivered overnight. Smart lockers and automated sorting centres, powered by big data, have made the whole process faster and more accurate than ever before.

More importantly, this development has reshaped our daily lives. With reliable next-day delivery, people can shop online for almost anything, from food to books, without leaving home. Such convenience saves us time and energy, and it has also created millions of jobs for delivery workers across the country.

In conclusion, China's express delivery industry has advanced rapidly and brought real benefits to ordinary people. I firmly believe it will continue to make our lives even more convenient.

【参考译文】

作为一名受邀在本次调查中分享看法的学生,我很乐意就中国的快递行业谈谈自己的观点——这个行业近年来以惊人的速度成长。

首先,这个行业近期的发展令人瞩目。如今快递网络甚至覆盖到偏远的乡村,过去要一周才能送到的包裹现在可以隔夜送达。由大数据驱动的智能快递柜和自动分拣中心,让整个流程比以往更快、更准确。

更重要的是,这种发展重塑了我们的日常生活。有了可靠的次日达,人们足不出户就能在网上购买几乎任何东西,从食品到书籍。这样的便利为我们节省了时间和精力,也为全国的快递从业者创造了数百万个工作岗位。

总之,中国的快递行业发展迅速,给普通人带来了实实在在的好处。我坚信它会继续让我们的生活变得更加便利。

【第 1 段】开头即应景亮中心。本段用 As a student invited to share my views in this survey 呼应调查情境、点明应答身份,再以 which has grown at an astonishing pace 的定语从句总起中心,落实了首段『应邀点题加亮中心』的功能。

【第 2 段】发展段有具体支撑。本段用 parcels that once took a week can be delivered overnight 做今昔对比,又举 Smart lockers and automated sorting centres 的智能技术,把『发展』写得具体可信,而非空喊『很发达』。

【第 3 段】影响落到普通人。本段以 More importantly 递进到影响,用 people can shop online for almost anything 写个人便利,再以 created millions of jobs 补社会层面的就业影响,从个人到社会有层次。

【第 4 段】总评加展望收尾。本段用 In conclusion 合并发展与影响重申中心,再以 I firmly believe it will continue 表态展望收尾,干净呼应开头。

ANALYSIS · 审题与立意

这道题到底要写什么、立意是什么

动笔前先钉死本题的核心写作任务与读者语域 ,再定中心立意与要展开的要点 —— 这些是本题特有的内容判断,不是通用套路。

核心任务

写快递业发展加影响

本题要写一篇就中国快递业发表看法的短文,任务是双份的:既要写 its recent development,又要写 its impact on people's lives,两件事缺一不可,只写一件直接丢分。

读者 · 语域

应邀答卷的正式书面语

身份是被 the business school of your university 邀请、参与 conducting a survey 的学生,面向调查发起方作答,用正式书面语即可。它虽叫 response,本质是 essay 议论短文,不是信件,无需 Dear 称呼和落款署名。

中心立意

发展迅猛且惠及生活

中心论点:中国快递业近年发展迅猛,并实实在在改善了人们的生活——正好一句话同时回应 its recent development and its impact on people's lives。

要展开的要点
  1. 发展:快、广、智能 第一个要点落实 its recent development:快递网络覆盖到偏远乡村、包裹次日达、智能快递柜与大数据分拣提高效率,用可验证的事实而非空泛形容词。
  2. 影响:网购便利加就业 第二个要点落实 its impact on people's lives:人们足不出户就能网购、省时省力,行业还为社会创造大量就业岗位。
  3. 整体评价与展望 第三个要点用于收尾:把发展与影响合起来给一句整体评价,并展望它会让生活更便利。
STRUCTURE · 谋篇与逐段

怎么分段、每段写什么、能套哪些句架

按写作家族给出现成的段落框架(每段承担什么功能),并为每段配可直接套用的 功能句架(留出填本题内容的空位)。段序与上方参考范文一一对应。

  1. 第 1 段
    应邀点题加亮中心 呼应 conducting a survey 的情境,表明受邀作答,并用一句话端出中心论点。
  2. 第 2 段
    专写行业发展 集中笔墨落实 its recent development,用具体事实支撑。
  3. 第 3 段
    专写生活影响 把镜头转到普通人身上,落实 its impact on people's lives。
  4. 第 4 段
    总评加展望 合并两任务重申中心,并以一句展望收尾。
第 1 段 受邀作答加总起发展快

点明应 the business school of your university 之邀,就 express delivery service industry in China 发表看法,并总起一句:这个行业近年发展惊人。

  • 应景表态句架 As a student invited to share my views in this survey, I am glad to comment on ...(填本题要评论的对象)
  • 定语从句总起 ..., which has grown at an astonishing pace in recent years.(用 which 从句给对象补一句总评)
第 2 段 网络广加次日达加智能分拣

落实 its recent development:网络覆盖到偏远乡村、包裹从一周变次日达、智能快递柜与大数据分拣提高效率。

  • 主题句领起 To begin with, the recent development of ... is remarkable.(一句话点出本段谈发展)
  • 今昔对比举例 Parcels that once took a week can now be delivered overnight.(用 once ... now ... 做前后对比,让变化可感)
第 3 段 网购便利加创造就业

落实 its impact on people's lives:人们足不出户就能网购、省时省力,行业还为快递从业者创造大量岗位。

  • 递进过渡 More importantly, this development has reshaped our daily lives.(用 More importantly 把话题从发展递进到影响)
  • 凭借状语引好处 With reliable next-day delivery, people can ...(用 With 引出条件,再说它带来的具体好处)
第 4 段 重申中心加展望更便利

收束:快递业发展快、给普通人带来实惠,并展望它会让生活更方便,呼应开头中心。

  • 总结提示语 In conclusion, ... has advanced rapidly and brought real benefits to ...(用 In conclusion 收束并合并两个要点)
  • 表态展望 I firmly believe it will continue to make our lives even more convenient.(用 I firmly believe 加将来时展望收尾)
REVIEW · 自检避坑

本题在四个评分维度怎样算达标、容易在哪丢分

按阅卷四维(内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式)给出本题达标要点,并把最容易踩的低分写法摆出来 + 给改法 —— 这是写作版的「狠拆诱人错项」。

  • 内容切题
    双任务各占一段 本题最易只写发展、漏掉影响。达标要点是让发展和影响各有一个专段,任何一块空缺都会被判偏题失分。
  • 结构连贯
    路标词贯穿全篇 本题四段之间应各有一个明确过渡,缺了衔接词,四段会像四段互不相干的话,连贯分要扣。
  • 语言准确
    完成时加现在时描述变化 本题谈『近期发展』最贴切的是现在完成时;易失分处是把 has developed 写成 developed,或第三人称漏掉动词的 -s。
  • 字数格式
    区间内且无书信格式 达标要点是既不欠字数也不超上限,且全篇是议论短文形态,不带 Dear 称呼与署名。
典型低分写法 · 反面示例与改法
  • 空喊方便无支撑 反面示例(劣质写法):Express delivery is very fast and very convenient. It is very good for us and makes us happy. 改后:Parcels that once took a week now arrive overnight, so people can receive online orders without leaving home.
  • 只写发展漏影响 反面示例:通篇都在讲行业多先进、快递多快,却一句没提对人们生活的影响,直接漏掉 its impact on people's lives。修正:单列一段写网购便利、省时省力与就业带动。
  • 错当书信套格式 反面示例:开头写 Dear Sir, 结尾写 Yours sincerely, Li Ming。本题是 write a response 形式的 essay,不需要称呼与署名,套信件格式反而失分。
FAQ · 关于本篇的常见问题

常见问题

围绕本题的写作题目与要求、作文类型、立意要点、参考范文、谋篇分段与评分丢分,逐条给出可核对的答案。

2024年12月英语四级真题第1套 写作的写作题目是什么?要求写多少字?
2024年12月英语四级真题第1套 写作(Part I)的写作要求为:Suppose the business school of your university is conducting a survey to collect students' opinions on the express delivery service industry in China. You are to write a response about its recent development and its impact on people's lives. You will have 30 minutes to write the essay. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words. 本题要求120–180 词。
2024年12月英语四级真题第1套 写作属于哪种类型的作文、有什么格式要求?
2024年12月英语四级真题第1套 写作 是四六级短文写作(议论 / 应用文 / 报告等短文)。写作要求120–180 词。
2024年12月英语四级真题第1套 写作(写快递业发展加影响)应该怎么立意、写哪几个要点?
2024年12月英语四级真题第1套 写作的中心立意是中心论点:中国快递业近年发展迅猛,并实实在在改善了人们的生活——正好一句话同时回应 its recent development and its impact on people's lives。可展开的要点:第一个要点落实 its recent development:快递网络覆盖到偏远乡村、包裹次日达、智能快递柜与大数据分拣提高效率,用可验证的事实而非空泛形容词;第二个要点落实 its impact on people's lives:人们足不出户就能网购、省时省力,行业还为社会创造大量就业岗位;第三个要点用于收尾:把发展与影响合起来给一句整体评价,并展望它会让生活更便利。
2024年12月英语四级真题第1套 写作(写快递业发展加影响)的参考范文是怎样的?多少词?
2024年12月英语四级真题第1套 写作的参考范文(161 词):As a student invited to share my views in this survey, I am glad to comment on the express delivery industry in China, which has grown at an astonishing pace in recent years. To begin with, the recent development of this industry is remarkable. Delivery networks now reach even remote villages, and parcels that once took a week can be delivered overnight. Smart lockers and automated sorting centres, powered by big data, have made the whole process faster and more accurate than ever before. More importantly, this development has reshaped our daily lives. With reliable next-day delivery, people can shop online for almost anything, from food to books, without leaving home. Such convenience saves us time and energy, and it has also created millions of jobs for delivery workers across the country. In conclusion, China's express delivery industry has advanced rapidly and brought real benefits to ordinary people. I firmly believe it will continue to make our lives even more convenient.
2024年12月英语四级真题第1套 写作(写快递业发展加影响)这篇作文怎么分段、每段写什么?
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2024年12月英语四级真题第1套 写作(写快递业发展加影响)作文容易在哪丢分?
按内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式四维评分,本题达标要点:内容切题——本题最易只写发展、漏掉影响。达标要点是让发展和影响各有一个专段,任何一块空缺都会被判偏题失分;结构连贯——本题四段之间应各有一个明确过渡,缺了衔接词,四段会像四段互不相干的话,连贯分要扣;语言准确——本题谈『近期发展』最贴切的是现在完成时;易失分处是把 has developed 写成 developed,或第三人称漏掉动词的 -s;字数格式——达标要点是既不欠字数也不超上限,且全篇是议论短文形态,不带 Dear 称呼与署名。 典型低分写法(须避免):反面示例(劣质写法):Express delivery is very fast and very convenient. It is very good for us and makes us happy. 改后:Parcels that once took a week now arrive overnight, so people can receive online orders without leaving home;反面示例:通篇都在讲行业多先进、快递多快,却一句没提对人们生活的影响,直接漏掉 its impact on people's lives。修正:单列一段写网购便利、省时省力与就业带动;反面示例:开头写 Dear Sir, 结尾写 Yours sincerely, Li Ming。本题是 write a response 形式的 essay,不需要称呼与署名,套信件格式反而失分。

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