EXAM · 来自 英语六级写作 · 2016 年 6 月 · 第 3 套 · Part I

2016年6月·第3套英语六级写作 · 题目、范文与解析

本页是 2016年6月英语六级真题第3套 写作 的写作真题页(四六级短文写作)—— 与试卷排版同一卷面:完整写作要求(Directions,词数要求 150–200 词)连续排印 ,卷面下方直接给出参考范文(159 词)与整篇中译、逐段拆解,另附审题立意、谋篇句架与评分自检 。

PROMPT & MODEL ESSAY · 写作题和范文

写作题和范文

本页写作题面、参考范文与逐段解析由懒笔记基于2016年6月·第3套 英语六级写作原卷整理。与试卷排版同一卷面:完整写作要求(Directions,含主题、文体、词数与署名约束)连续排印。写作是生产性任务、无 ABCD 标准答案——题面即整道题;卷面下方直接给出满足全部硬约束的参考范文、整篇中译与逐段拆解。

真题卷第3套(2016-06) • 六级
Part I
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on e-learning. Try to imagine what will happen when more and more people study online instead of attending school. You are required to write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

【参考范文 · 159 词】写作无唯一标准答案,以下为达标示范

E-learning is quickly becoming a part of everyday life, and it is likely that in the near future many people will study entirely online rather than walk into a classroom. When that day comes, our idea of "going to school" will change dramatically.

On the bright side, learning will grow far more flexible and inclusive. We can foresee students attending live lectures from home, receiving AI-powered personalized tutoring, and running experiments in virtual laboratories, so quality education will reach even remote villages. Yet the picture will not be entirely rosy. Without face-to-face interaction, learners may feel isolated, self-discipline will matter more than ever, and the warm social life of campus, clubs, friendships and shared canteens, may gradually fade away.

In the long run, I believe online study will not fully replace schools but will merge with them. The wisest path is to enjoy the convenience technology offers while deliberately preserving the human connection that no screen can truly reproduce.

【参考译文】

在线学习正迅速成为日常生活的一部分,很可能在不远的将来,许多人将完全在线学习,而不再走进教室。当那一天到来时,我们对「上学」的理解将发生巨大改变。

从好的一面看,学习将变得更加灵活和普惠。我们可以预见:学生在家中收看直播课、接受人工智能驱动的个性化辅导、在虚拟实验室里做实验,于是优质教育将惠及偏远的乡村。然而,前景不会全然美好。缺少面对面的交流,学习者可能感到孤立,自律将比以往任何时候都更重要,而校园里温暖的社交生活——社团、友谊、共用的食堂——也可能渐渐消逝。

长远来看,我相信在线学习不会完全取代学校,而会与之融合。最明智的道路,是既享受技术带来的便利,又刻意守护那种任何屏幕都无法真正复制的人际联结。

【第 1 段】趋势句+预测句起头。首句「E-learning is quickly becoming a part of everyday life」点明趋势,紧接「it is likely that in the near future...will study entirely online」用预测性句式把镜头推向未来,一步锁定『想象未来』视角,落实了第一段『点明趋势+抛出预测』的功能。

【第 2 段】正反画面用将来时对照。「On the bright side」领出正面,用「attending live lectures from home, receiving AI-powered personalized tutoring, and running experiments in virtual laboratories」三个具体画面把预测落地;再用「Yet the picture will not be entirely rosy」转折,预测孤立、自律、社交淡化等隐忧,全程 will / may 保持将来语气,兑现了『用将来时铺展具体画面』。

【第 3 段】权衡判断收尾。「In the long run, I believe online study will not fully replace schools but will merge with them」把正反两面收成一句平衡判断,末句「The wisest path is to...」给出态度建议,回扣中心、干净收束,落实了第三段功能。

ANALYSIS · 审题与立意

这道题到底要写什么、立意是什么

动笔前先钉死本题的核心写作任务与读者语域 ,再定中心立意与要展开的要点 —— 这些是本题特有的内容判断,不是通用套路。

核心任务

预测在线学习普及后的图景

本题的核心动作藏在 Try to imagine what will happen when more and more people study online instead of attending school 里——命令词是 imagine(想象)而非 discuss(讨论),对象是「更多人在线学习、不再到校后『会发生什么』」。所以要写的不是 e-learning 好不好,而是站在今天往未来看、预测那个场景里将出现的变化,全篇因此应大量落在一般将来时上。

读者 · 语域

面向阅卷人的正式议论短文

题目只说 write a short essay on e-learning,没有指定收信人或身份,属于面向阅卷人的正式书面议论文。因此不需要称呼语、落款,也不必刻意口语化;用规范、连贯的书面英语,把「想象」讲得有条理即可,不要强行加戏写成书信或对话。

中心立意

在线学习将带来机遇也带来隐忧

本篇立场一句话钉死:当 more and more people study online instead of attending school 成为现实,学习会变得更灵活普惠,但面对面互动与校园生活的缺失也会带来新问题,未来是机遇与隐忧并存、而非单向的好或坏。

要展开的要点
  1. 正面:更灵活、更普惠 预测学习将更灵活高效、优质资源更普惠——在家上直播课、AI 个性化辅导、虚拟实验室,让偏远地区也能享受好教育。
  2. 反面:缺互动、弱社交 预测负面后果:没有面对面交流,学习者易感孤立,对自律要求更高,社团、友谊等校园社交生活可能淡化。
  3. 权衡:融合而非取代 落到态度:长远看在线学习不会完全取代学校,而会与之融合;明智之举是享受技术便利、同时刻意守住屏幕替代不了的人际联结。
STRUCTURE · 谋篇与逐段

怎么分段、每段写什么、能套哪些句架

按写作家族给出现成的段落框架(每段承担什么功能),并为每段配可直接套用的 功能句架(留出填本题内容的空位)。段序与上方参考范文一一对应。

  1. 第 1 段
    点明趋势+抛出预测 指出在线学习正成为日常趋势,顺势引出全篇预测:当 more and more people study online 时,『上学』的概念将大变。
  2. 第 2 段
    分层铺开正反后果 主体段用让步对比结构,先预测正面(更灵活普惠、可想象的具体场景),再转折预测负面(缺互动、弱社交、要自律)。
  3. 第 3 段
    权衡后给出态度 收尾给出平衡判断:在线学习将与学校融合而非取代,并提出应享受便利同时守住人际联结的态度。
第 1 段 在线学习成趋势,上学概念将变

落点:先说 e-learning 正快速融入日常,再预测在不远的将来许多人将完全在线学习、不再走进教室,我们对上学这件事的理解会随之巨变。

  • 点明趋势 ___ is quickly becoming a part of everyday life.
  • 引出预测 It is likely that in the near future many people will ___ rather than ___.
第 2 段 正面画面+反面隐忧对照

落点:正面预测在家上直播课、AI 个性化辅导、虚拟实验室让优质教育普惠偏远地区;转折后预测没有面对面交流会让学习者孤立、更需自律、校园社交淡化。

  • 亮正面预测 On the bright side, learning will grow far more ___ and ___.
  • 举可想象画面 We can foresee ___, ___, and ___, so ___ will ___.
  • 让步转折到反面 Yet the picture will not be entirely rosy; without ___, ___ may ___.
第 3 段 融合而非取代+守住人际联结

落点:长远看在线学习不会完全取代学校而会与之融合;明智之举是享受技术便利、同时刻意保留屏幕无法真正复制的人际联结。

  • 权衡下判断 In the long run, I believe ___ will not ___ but will ___.
  • 给出态度建议 The wisest path is to ___ while ___.
REVIEW · 自检避坑

本题在四个评分维度怎样算达标、容易在哪丢分

按阅卷四维(内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式)给出本题达标要点,并把最容易踩的低分写法摆出来 + 给改法 —— 这是写作版的「狠拆诱人错项」。

  • 内容切题
    必须是预测、且正反兼顾 本题达标要点是紧扣 imagine what will happen when more and more people study online 的『预测』视角,且正反两类后果都写到;最易失分处是写成 e-learning 利弊议论或个人偏好,忘了『想象未来』。
  • 结构连贯
    三段分明+让步转折清晰 本题要三段递进、主体段用让步对比把正反接上;易失分处是通篇并列短句、缺转折,或正反后果糊在一起没有『Yet』这样的信号词分隔。
  • 语言准确
    将来时+预测性表达到位 本题达标要点是预测句稳用将来时,并点缀 It is likely that…、We can foresee…、In the long run… 等预测性表达;易失分处是该用将来时的地方用了现在时,削弱『想象未来』语气。
  • 字数格式
    落在硬性区间、无多余格式 本题是硬性区间题,at least 150 words but no more than 200 words,低于 150 或超过 200 都扣分;正文是议论短文,不要写称呼、落款等应用文格式。
典型低分写法 · 反面示例与改法
  • 写成利弊议论 反面示例:"E-learning has many advantages. It is convenient and cheap. But it also has some disadvantages." 这是在评论利弊、没有预测视角。改为:"When most people study online, classrooms may fall silent, and learning will happen anywhere at any time." 用将来时把它拉回『想象未来』。
  • 该将来时用了现在时 反面示例:"When people study online, they feel lonely and they don't have friends at school." 时态是现在时,像在陈述现状。改为:"When people study online, they may feel lonely, and campus friendships will become harder to build."
  • 只谈一面 反面示例:全篇只写 "Online study will be cheaper, faster and more comfortable." 一味唱好。补上反面预测:"Yet without face-to-face contact, students will need far stronger self-discipline, and campus life may fade." 才平衡。
  • 空喊方便无场景 反面示例:"In the future, online study will be very convenient and good for everyone." 太空。改为:"In the future, a student in a remote village will join a live class and get AI tutoring at home." 画面一出,预测就立起来了。
FAQ · 关于本篇的常见问题

常见问题

围绕本题的写作题目与要求、作文类型、立意要点、参考范文、谋篇分段与评分丢分,逐条给出可核对的答案。

2016年6月英语六级真题第3套 写作的写作题目是什么?要求写多少字?
2016年6月英语六级真题第3套 写作(Part I)的写作要求为:For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on e-learning . Try to imagine what will happen when more and more people study online instead of attending school. You are required to write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words. 本题要求150–200 词。
2016年6月英语六级真题第3套 写作属于哪种类型的作文、有什么格式要求?
2016年6月英语六级真题第3套 写作 是四六级短文写作(议论 / 应用文 / 报告等短文)。写作要求150–200 词。
2016年6月英语六级真题第3套 写作(预测在线学习普及后的图景)应该怎么立意、写哪几个要点?
2016年6月英语六级真题第3套 写作的中心立意是本篇立场一句话钉死:当 more and more people study online instead of attending school 成为现实,学习会变得更灵活普惠,但面对面互动与校园生活的缺失也会带来新问题,未来是机遇与隐忧并存、而非单向的好或坏。可展开的要点:预测学习将更灵活高效、优质资源更普惠——在家上直播课、AI 个性化辅导、虚拟实验室,让偏远地区也能享受好教育;预测负面后果:没有面对面交流,学习者易感孤立,对自律要求更高,社团、友谊等校园社交生活可能淡化;落到态度:长远看在线学习不会完全取代学校,而会与之融合;明智之举是享受技术便利、同时刻意守住屏幕替代不了的人际联结。
2016年6月英语六级真题第3套 写作(预测在线学习普及后的图景)的参考范文是怎样的?多少词?
2016年6月英语六级真题第3套 写作的参考范文(159 词):E-learning is quickly becoming a part of everyday life, and it is likely that in the near future many people will study entirely online rather than walk into a classroom. When that day comes, our idea of "going to school" will change dramatically. On the bright side, learning will grow far more flexible and inclusive. We can foresee students attending live lectures from home, receiving AI-powered personalized tutoring, and running experiments in virtual laboratories, so quality education will reach even remote villages. Yet the picture will not be entirely rosy. Without face-to-face interaction, learners may feel isolated, self-discipline will matter more than ever, and the warm social life of campus, clubs, friendships and shared canteens, may gradually fade away. In the long run, I believe online study will not fully replace schools but will merge with them. The wisest path is to enjoy the convenience technology offers while deliberately preserving the human connection that no screen can truly reproduce.
2016年6月英语六级真题第3套 写作(预测在线学习普及后的图景)这篇作文怎么分段、每段写什么?
2016年6月英语六级真题第3套 写作的参考范文共 3 段:第 1 段(点明趋势+抛出预测)指出在线学习正成为日常趋势,顺势引出全篇预测:当 more and more people study online 时,『上学』的概念将大变;第 2 段(分层铺开正反后果)主体段用让步对比结构,先预测正面(更灵活普惠、可想象的具体场景),再转折预测负面(缺互动、弱社交、要自律);第 3 段(权衡后给出态度)收尾给出平衡判断:在线学习将与学校融合而非取代,并提出应享受便利同时守住人际联结的态度。
2016年6月英语六级真题第3套 写作(预测在线学习普及后的图景)作文容易在哪丢分?
按内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式四维评分,本题达标要点:内容切题——本题达标要点是紧扣 imagine what will happen when more and more people study online 的『预测』视角,且正反两类后果都写到;最易失分处是写成 e-learning 利弊议论或个人偏好,忘了『想象未来』;结构连贯——本题要三段递进、主体段用让步对比把正反接上;易失分处是通篇并列短句、缺转折,或正反后果糊在一起没有『Yet』这样的信号词分隔;语言准确——本题达标要点是预测句稳用将来时,并点缀 It is likely that…、We can foresee…、In the long run… 等预测性表达;易失分处是该用将来时的地方用了现在时,削弱『想象未来』语气;字数格式——本题是硬性区间题,at least 150 words but no more than 200 words,低于 150 或超过 200 都扣分;正文是议论短文,不要写称呼、落款等应用文格式。 典型低分写法(须避免):反面示例:"E-learning has many advantages. It is convenient and cheap. But it also has some disadvantages." 这是在评论利弊、没有预测视角。改为:"When most people study online, classrooms may fall silent, and learning will happen anywhere at any time." 用将来时把它拉回『想象未来』;反面示例:"When people study online, they feel lonely and they don't have friends at school." 时态是现在时,像在陈述现状。改为:"When people study online, they may feel lonely, and campus friendships will become harder to build.";反面示例:全篇只写 "Online study will be cheaper, faster and more comfortable." 一味唱好。补上反面预测:"Yet without face-to-face contact, students will need far stronger self-discipline, and campus life may fade." 才平衡;反面示例:"In the future, online study will be very convenient and good for everyone." 太空。改为:"In the future, a student in a remote village will join a live class and get AI tutoring at home." 画面一出,预测就立起来了。

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