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2013年考研英语一写作(小作文) · 题目、范文与解析

本页是 2013年考研英语一真题 写作 的写作真题页(应用文小作文)—— 与试卷排版同一卷面:完整写作要求(Directions,词数要求 约 100 词、不署真名)连续排印 ,卷面下方直接给出参考范文(104 词)与整篇中译、逐段拆解,另附审题立意、谋篇句架与评分自检 。

PROMPT & MODEL ESSAY · 写作题和范文

写作题和范文

本页写作题面、参考范文与逐段解析由懒笔记基于2013年 考研英语一写作原卷整理。与试卷排版同一卷面:完整写作要求(Directions,含主题、文体、词数与署名约束)连续排印。写作是生产性任务、无 ABCD 标准答案——题面即整道题;卷面下方直接给出满足全部硬约束的参考范文、整篇中译与逐段拆解。

英语一真题(2013)
Section III Part A
Directions:
Write an e-mail of about 100 words to a foreign teacher in your college, inviting him/her to be a judge for the upcoming English speech contest.
You should include the details you think necessary. You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET.
Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter, use “Li Ming ” instead.
Do not write the address. (10 points)

【参考范文 · 104 词】写作无唯一标准答案,以下为达标示范

Dear Professor Smith,

I am Li Ming, a sophomore from the English Department. On behalf of the Student Union, I am writing to sincerely invite you to serve as a judge for our upcoming English Speech Contest.

The contest will be held in Lecture Hall 3 on the afternoon of June 20th. Twelve finalists will each deliver a three-minute speech, and judges are expected to rate their fluency, content and delivery. Your comments would be truly valuable to us.

We would be honored if you could join us. Please let me know whether you are available. Thank you very much.

Yours sincerely, Li Ming

【参考译文】

尊敬的史密斯教授:

我是李明,英语系二年级学生。我谨代表学生会写信,诚挚邀请您担任我校即将举行的英语演讲比赛评委。

比赛将于6月20日下午在第三报告厅举行。十二名决赛选手将各作一场三分钟的演讲,评委需就选手的流利度、内容和表达等方面进行评分。您的点评对我们将非常宝贵。

如蒙您拨冗出席,我们将深感荣幸。请您回复告知是否方便。非常感谢。

此致 敬礼 李明

【第 1 段】礼貌称呼定调。Dear Professor Smith, 用尊称加姓开篇,一句话就把正式友好的语气立住,落实了称呼块的功能。

【第 2 段】先身份后邀请。I am Li Ming, a sophomore … 先亮身份,紧接 I am writing to sincerely invite you to serve as a judge … 直陈来意,开门见山不绕弯,兑现“亮身份再亮意图”的方法与直陈邀请句架。

【第 3 段】四项细节到位。The contest will be held in Lecture Hall 3 on the afternoon of June 20th 给出时间地点;Twelve finalists … three-minute speech … judges are expected to rate their fluency, content and delivery 交代形式与职责,把抽象的“details”逐项落地。

【第 4 段】委婉收尾留接口。We would be honored if you could join us 委婉抬高对方,Please let me know whether you are available 请回复,Thank you very much 致谢,三句话干净收尾。

【第 5 段】假名落款不出错。Yours sincerely, 后署 Li Ming,严守不得署真名的硬要求,格式块闭合。

ANALYSIS · 审题与立意

这道题到底要写什么、立意是什么

动笔前先钉死本题的核心写作任务与读者语域 ,再定中心立意与要展开的要点 —— 这些是本题特有的内容判断,不是通用套路。

核心任务

邀请外教当演讲赛评委

核心交际任务是inviting him/her to be a judge for the upcoming English speech contest,并且You should include the details you think necessary。一句话钉死:以学生身份写信邀请外教担任即将举行的英语演讲比赛评委,且要把比赛的必要细节补齐,不能只写一句空邀请。

读者 · 语域

写给本校外教·正式友好

读者是a foreign teacher in your college,写信人以学生 Li Ming 的身份出面。师生关系、跨文化、又是有求于人的邀请,语域要正式而友好:称呼用 Dear + 尊称/头衔 + 姓,措辞礼貌委婉,不能像跟同学聊天那样随意直呼其名或用生硬祈使句。

中心立意

诚邀外教出任评委

本信的交际目的:礼貌地邀请这位外教担任学校即将举行的英语演讲比赛评委,并让对方掌握做决定所需的全部信息,从而促成其答应。全文每句都应服务于inviting him/her to be a judge for the upcoming English speech contest这个目的。

要展开的要点
  1. 开门见山发出邀请 先自报身份(学生 Li Ming / 学生会),再直接说明来意:诚邀对方担任本校英语演讲比赛的评委。对应任务点inviting him/her to be a judge for the upcoming English speech contest。
  2. 补齐比赛必要细节 落实You should include the details you think necessary:自拟但合理地交代时间(如 6 月 20 日下午)、地点(如某报告厅)、比赛形式(若干选手各作限时演讲)与评委职责(就流利度、内容、表达等打分点评),让对方能据此判断能否参加。
  3. 表达期待致谢请回复 结尾用委婉句式表达希望对方能拨冗出席,感谢其考虑,并礼貌请对方回复告知是否有空,收束全信、留出互动。
STRUCTURE · 谋篇与逐段

怎么分段、每段写什么、能套哪些句架

按写作家族给出现成的段落框架(每段承担什么功能),并为每段配可直接套用的 功能句架(留出填本题内容的空位)。段序与上方参考范文一一对应。

  1. 第 1 段
    称呼 对外教的正式称呼,用 Dear + 头衔/尊称 + 姓,奠定礼貌语气。
  2. 第 2 段
    自我介绍+发出邀请 表明身份,开门见山说明来意——诚邀对方担任英语演讲比赛评委。
  3. 第 3 段
    补充比赛细节 交代时间、地点、比赛形式与评委职责,落实You should include the details you think necessary。
  4. 第 4 段
    表达期待与感谢 委婉表达希望对方出席、致谢并礼貌请其回复。
  5. 第 5 段
    落款署名 客套结束语加指定署名,收束全信。
第 1 段 Dear + 尊称 + 姓

如 Dear Professor Smith,——一个礼貌、正式、指向明确的称呼即可。

  • 正式称呼 Dear + 头衔/尊称 + 姓,(如 Dear Professor ___,)
第 2 段 自报家门+邀您当评委

说明自己是英语系学生 Li Ming、代表学生会,随即发出邀请:诚邀对方担任即将举行的英语演讲比赛评委,紧扣inviting him/her to be a judge for the upcoming English speech contest。

  • 自我介绍 I am ___, a ___ from ___.(如 a sophomore from the ___ Department)
  • 直陈邀请 I am writing to sincerely invite you to serve as a judge for ___.
第 3 段 时间地点+赛制职责

自拟合理细节:如 6 月 20 日下午在某报告厅举行,若干名选手各作限时演讲,评委就流利度、内容与表达等方面打分点评,兑现You should include the details you think necessary。

  • 交代时间地点 The ___ will be held in ___ on ___.
  • 说明赛制职责 ___ contestants will each deliver a ___ speech, and judges are expected to ___.
第 4 段 盼出席+请回复致谢

表达若对方能拨冗担任评委将深感荣幸,礼貌请其回复告知是否方便,并致以感谢,给互动留出接口。

  • 委婉请求 We would be honored if you could ___.
  • 请回复致谢 Please let me know whether ___. Thank you very much.
第 5 段 Yours sincerely, Li Ming

结束语后落款为 Li Ming,严格遵守Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter的要求。

  • 得体落款 Yours sincerely,(换行)+ 指定署名
REVIEW · 自检避坑

本题在四个评分维度怎样算达标、容易在哪丢分

按阅卷四维(内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式)给出本题达标要点,并把最容易踩的低分写法摆出来 + 给改法 —— 这是写作版的「狠拆诱人错项」。

  • 内容切题
    邀请+细节+致谢齐全 本题达标要点是既写出邀请,又落实You should include the details you think necessary;最易失分处是只写一句邀请、细节空缺,导致任务点缺失。
  • 结构连贯
    三段正文层次清楚 邀请、细节、致谢三段各司其职、顺序合理,称呼与落款齐备,不把所有内容挤成一段。
  • 语言准确
    邀请句式得体正确 用 invite you to serve as a judge、would be honored if you could 等正式邀请句式,措辞友好;避免 want you come 这类中式直译错误。
  • 字数格式
    约百词·假名·不写地址 须写成约an e-mail of about 100 words的邮件,落款遵守Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter,并注意Do not write the address。
典型低分写法 · 反面示例与改法
  • 误签真名 反面示例:结尾写成 Yours sincerely, Wang Lei(签了真名)。这违反Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter,应改为 Yours sincerely, Li Ming。
  • 只邀请无细节 反面示例:I invite you to be a judge. Thank you.——只有邀请、没有任何细节,违反You should include the details you think necessary。应补上:The contest will be held in Lecture Hall 3 on June 20th, and judges will rate the contestants' performance.
  • 中式逐字直译 反面示例:I very want you come to be our contest judge.(逐字硬译、语法错)。应改为:I would be grateful if you could come and serve as a judge for our contest.
  • 写成议论文或加地址 反面示例:开头先写一大段“With the development of society, speech contests are becoming more and more important …”式议论,或在信头写上学校地址。前者偏离邀请邮件文体、稀释任务点,后者违反Do not write the address,都应删去,直接进入邀请正文。
FAQ · 关于本篇的常见问题

常见问题

围绕本题的写作题目与要求、作文类型、立意要点、参考范文、谋篇分段与评分丢分,逐条给出可核对的答案。

2013年考研英语一真题 写作的写作题目是什么?要求写多少字?
2013年考研英语一真题 写作(Section III Part A)的写作要求为:Write an e-mail of about 100 words to a foreign teacher in your college, inviting him/her to be a judge for the upcoming English speech contest. You should include the details you think necessary. You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET. Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter, use “Li Ming ” instead. Do not write the address. (10 points) 本题要求约 100 词。 作为应用文,正文须按规定落款、不得署本人真实姓名。
2013年考研英语一真题 写作属于哪种类型的作文、有什么格式要求?
2013年考研英语一真题 写作 是考研小作文(书信 / 通知 / 海报等应用文)。写作要求约 100 词。应用文须按要求落款、不得署本人真实姓名。
2013年考研英语一真题 写作(邀请外教当演讲赛评委)应该怎么立意、写哪几个要点?
2013年考研英语一真题 写作的中心立意是本信的交际目的:礼貌地邀请这位外教担任学校即将举行的英语演讲比赛评委,并让对方掌握做决定所需的全部信息,从而促成其答应。全文每句都应服务于inviting him/her to be a judge for the upcoming English speech contest这个目的。可展开的要点:先自报身份(学生 Li Ming / 学生会),再直接说明来意:诚邀对方担任本校英语演讲比赛的评委。对应任务点inviting him/her to be a judge for the upcoming English speech contest;落实You should include the details you think necessary:自拟但合理地交代时间(如 6 月 20 日下午)、地点(如某报告厅)、比赛形式(若干选手各作限时演讲)与评委职责(就流利度、内容、表达等打分点评),让对方能据此判断能否参加;结尾用委婉句式表达希望对方能拨冗出席,感谢其考虑,并礼貌请对方回复告知是否有空,收束全信、留出互动。
2013年考研英语一真题 写作(邀请外教当演讲赛评委)的参考范文是怎样的?多少词?
2013年考研英语一真题 写作的参考范文(104 词):Dear Professor Smith, I am Li Ming, a sophomore from the English Department. On behalf of the Student Union, I am writing to sincerely invite you to serve as a judge for our upcoming English Speech Contest. The contest will be held in Lecture Hall 3 on the afternoon of June 20th. Twelve finalists will each deliver a three-minute speech, and judges are expected to rate their fluency, content and delivery. Your comments would be truly valuable to us. We would be honored if you could join us. Please let me know whether you are available. Thank you very much. Yours sincerely, Li Ming
2013年考研英语一真题 写作(邀请外教当演讲赛评委)这篇作文怎么分段、每段写什么?
2013年考研英语一真题 写作的参考范文共 5 段:第 1 段(称呼)对外教的正式称呼,用 Dear + 头衔/尊称 + 姓,奠定礼貌语气;第 2 段(自我介绍+发出邀请)表明身份,开门见山说明来意——诚邀对方担任英语演讲比赛评委;第 3 段(补充比赛细节)交代时间、地点、比赛形式与评委职责,落实You should include the details you think necessary;第 4 段(表达期待与感谢)委婉表达希望对方出席、致谢并礼貌请其回复;第 5 段(落款署名)客套结束语加指定署名,收束全信。
2013年考研英语一真题 写作(邀请外教当演讲赛评委)作文容易在哪丢分?
按内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式四维评分,本题达标要点:内容切题——本题达标要点是既写出邀请,又落实You should include the details you think necessary;最易失分处是只写一句邀请、细节空缺,导致任务点缺失;结构连贯——邀请、细节、致谢三段各司其职、顺序合理,称呼与落款齐备,不把所有内容挤成一段;语言准确——用 invite you to serve as a judge、would be honored if you could 等正式邀请句式,措辞友好;避免 want you come 这类中式直译错误;字数格式——须写成约an e-mail of about 100 words的邮件,落款遵守Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter,并注意Do not write the address。 典型低分写法(须避免):反面示例:结尾写成 Yours sincerely, Wang Lei(签了真名)。这违反Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter,应改为 Yours sincerely, Li Ming;反面示例:I invite you to be a judge. Thank you.——只有邀请、没有任何细节,违反You should include the details you think necessary。应补上:The contest will be held in Lecture Hall 3 on June 20th, and judges will rate the contestants' performance;反面示例:I very want you come to be our contest judge.(逐字硬译、语法错)。应改为:I would be grateful if you could come and serve as a judge for our contest;反面示例:开头先写一大段“With the development of society, speech contests are becoming more and more important …”式议论,或在信头写上学校地址。前者偏离邀请邮件文体、稀释任务点,后者违反Do not write the address,都应删去,直接进入邀请正文。

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