2021年12月·第3套英语六级写作 · 题目、范文与解析
本页是 2021年12月英语六级真题第3套 写作 的写作真题页（四六级短文写作）—— 与试卷排版同一卷面：完整写作要求（Directions，词数要求 150–200 词）连续排印 ，卷面下方直接给出参考范文（187 词）与整篇中译、逐段拆解，另附审题立意、谋篇句架与评分自检 。
写作题和范文
本页写作题面、参考范文与逐段解析由懒笔记基于2021年12月·第3套 英语六级写作原卷整理。与试卷排版同一卷面：完整写作要求（Directions，含主题、文体、词数与署名约束）连续排印。写作是生产性任务、无 ABCD 标准答案——题面即整道题；卷面下方直接给出满足全部硬约束的参考范文、整篇中译与逐段拆解。
Some parents in China are overprotective of their children. They plan everything for their children, make all the decisions for them, and do not allow them to explore on their own in case they make mistakes or get hurt.
【参考范文 · 187 词】写作无唯一标准答案，以下为达标示范
It is not uncommon nowadays that some parents in China are overprotective of their children. They arrange everything, make every decision on their behalf, and forbid any independent exploration for fear of mistakes or injuries. In my view, however well-intentioned this practice may be, it does far more harm than good.
To begin with, such excessive protection deprives children of the chance to develop independence. When every choice is made for them, they never learn how to weigh options or solve problems on their own. Moreover, being shielded from all failure leaves them without resilience; a child who has never fallen simply does not know how to stand up again. As a result, these children may grow into adults who are competent in theory yet helpless in real life.
To address this issue, parents should first loosen their grip and let children make age-appropriate decisions by themselves. In addition, they ought to treat mistakes as valuable lessons rather than disasters to be avoided at all costs. Ultimately, the wisest parents shift their role from controllers to guides, offering support from behind instead of clearing every obstacle ahead.
【参考译文】
如今，中国一些家长对孩子过度保护的现象并不少见。他们替孩子安排好一切，代其做出每一个决定，还因为怕孩子犯错或受伤而禁止任何独立探索。在我看来，这种做法无论初衷多么美好，都是弊大于利的。
首先，这种过度保护剥夺了孩子发展独立能力的机会。当所有选择都由别人替他们做时，他们永远学不会自己权衡利弊、自己解决问题。此外，把孩子隔绝在一切失败之外，会让他们缺乏抗挫力；一个从未跌倒过的孩子，根本不知道该如何重新站起来。结果，这些孩子可能长成理论上很能干、现实生活中却手足无措的成年人。
为解决这一问题，家长首先应当松开双手，让孩子自己去做力所能及的决定。此外，他们应把犯错当作宝贵的一课，而不是不惜一切代价要避开的灾难。归根结底，最明智的家长会把自己的角色从掌控者转为引导者，在孩子身后给予支持，而不是替他们扫清前方的每一个障碍。
【第 1 段】转述加让步亮态度。首段先用 It is not uncommon nowadays that... 把现象概括转述（arrange everything, make every decision, forbid any independent exploration），没有照抄原句；再用 however well-intentioned this practice may be, it does far more harm than good 一句让步转折亮明弊大于利的立场，落实了 outline 第 1 段'转述现象＋亮态度'的功能。
【第 2 段】两条危害加因果收束。本段用 To begin with 领出'剥夺独立'、用 Moreover 递进到'缺乏抗挫力'，最后 As a result 收一句 competent in theory yet helpless in real life，把两条危害的后果拧成一股，正是 paragraphGuide 第 2 段'层层递进加因果收束'的落地。
【第 3 段】三条落地对策。本段 To address this issue 呼应任务动词，给出 loosen their grip and let children make age-appropriate decisions、treat mistakes as valuable lessons、shift their role from controllers to guides 三条具体做法，每条都是可操作动作而非口号，达成 outline 第 3 段'给出对策'的功能。
这道题到底要写什么、立意是什么
动笔前先钉死本题的核心写作任务与读者语域 ，再定中心立意与要展开的要点 —— 这些是本题特有的内容判断，不是通用套路。
评现象＋提对策
本题的核心任务被一句话钉死：comment on the phenomenon described in the passage and suggest measures to address the issue。现象就是短文里的家长过度保护——They plan everything for their children, make all the decisions for them, and do not allow them to explore on their own in case they make mistakes or get hurt。所以你要写的是：先表态这种现象好不好，再给出能落地的解决办法。
面向阅卷人的正式议论文
本题要求写的是 an essay related to the short passage given below，没有指定收信人、也不用称呼和落款，读者就是阅卷老师。因此用第三人称为主的正式书面语即可，态度可以有'我认为'（In my view），但不要口语缩写、不要写成给某人的信。六级这类现象类作文都属这一路，语域上求稳、求清楚，不必花哨。
过度保护弊大于利
全篇中心立场一句话：家长出于爱的过度保护，即 make all the decisions for them, and do not allow them to explore on their own，本意虽好却弊大于利，会拖累孩子的成长，必须改变。整篇的评论段和对策段都围绕这条立场展开。
- 危害一·剥夺独立能力 第一条要点：家长 make all the decisions for them，孩子从没机会自己权衡、自己解决问题，独立决策与生活自理能力就长不出来。
- 危害二·缺乏抗挫力 第二条要点：家长 do not allow them to explore on their own in case they make mistakes or get hurt，把孩子隔绝在一切失败之外，反而使他们经不起挫折、遇挫就垮。
- 对策·放手＋容错＋由管到导 第三块（对策）针对上面两条反着提：放手让孩子做力所能及的决定、把犯错当成学习机会、家长从掌控者转为引导陪伴者。三条都具体可操作，正好收束全篇。
怎么分段、每段写什么、能套哪些句架
按写作家族给出现成的段落框架（每段承担什么功能），并为每段配可直接套用的 功能句架（留出填本题内容的空位）。段序与上方参考范文一一对应。
- 第 1 段 转述现象＋亮态度 用一两句把短文里 Some parents in China are overprotective of their children 的现象概括转述，随即表明立场：这种做法弊大于利。
- 第 2 段 分析危害 分两层说清过度保护的坏处：剥夺独立能力、削弱抗挫力，并用一句因果收束，指出它如何影响孩子长远成长。
- 第 3 段 给出对策 针对危害提出具体可操作的解决办法，分点推进，收束全篇。
把 They plan everything for their children, make all the decisions for them, and do not allow them to explore on their own in case they make mistakes or get hurt 概括为'安排一切、代做决定、禁止独立探索'，然后表态：这种保护本意虽好，却弊大于利。
- 转述现象 It is not uncommon nowadays that ＋（用自己的话概括现象）. 用一句引出现象，避免照抄。
- 让步亮态度 However well-intentioned ＋（对方做法）may be, it does far more harm than good. 先退一步承认合理处，再亮明弊大于利的立场。
第一条：家长 make all the decisions for them，孩子学不会自己权衡与解决问题；第二条：家长 do not allow them to explore on their own，孩子被隔绝于失败之外、经不起挫折；收束：这样长大的孩子理论上能干、真实生活里却无助。
- 分点起首 To begin with / Moreover, ＋（一条危害的主题句）. 用序词把每条危害分开、层层推进。
- 因果收束 As a result, ＋（这些危害导致的长远后果）. 用结果句把并列的危害拧成一股。
针对现象里 make all the decisions for them, and do not allow them to explore on their own，给三条对策：放手让孩子做力所能及的决定、把犯错当成宝贵一课、家长从掌控者转为在身后提供支持的引导者。
- 领起对策 To address this issue, ＋主语＋should ＋（第一条具体做法）. 呼应任务里的 address，正式引出对策。
- 递进补充 In addition / Ultimately, ＋（进一步或更根本的做法）. 用递进词把多条对策串起、并拔高到角色转变。
本题在四个评分维度怎样算达标、容易在哪丢分
按阅卷四维（内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式）给出本题达标要点，并把最容易踩的低分写法摆出来 + 给改法 —— 这是写作版的「狠拆诱人错项」。
- 内容切题 两块都要且对准现象 本题必须同时完成 comment on the phenomenon described in the passage and suggest measures to address the issue，评论和对策都要扣住'家长过度保护、包办决定、不许试错'，跑到别的话题就偏了。
- 结构连贯 三段各司其职＋逻辑词到位 本题三段分别承担转述亮态度、分析危害、给对策，段间靠让步（however）与因果（as a result）衔接，把'本意好但方式害人'的逻辑讲通，读起来才连贯。
- 语言准确 现在时＋复数一致 本题讲的是普遍现象，通篇用一般现在时；children、parents 是复数，动词别漏。适当用 well-intentioned、resilience 等词能加分，但先保证不出低级错。
- 字数格式 卡在150到200之间 本题硬性要求 You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words，低于 150 或高于 200 都算违规；转述现象一句带过，把篇幅留给危害与对策。
- 只批评不给对策 反面示例：通篇都在说'家长过度保护害了孩子、剥夺了独立、削弱了抗挫力……'，结尾一句'这种现象令人担忧'就收了，全程没提任何解决办法。改法：删掉一部分重复的批评，专门加一段对策（放手让孩子自己决定、允许犯错、家长转为引导者），把 suggest measures 补齐。
- 整句搬原文凑数 反面示例：正文开头直接抄 'Some parents in China are overprotective of their children. They plan everything for their children, make all the decisions for them...'。改法：换成自己的概括——'It is not uncommon nowadays that some parents arrange everything and forbid any independent exploration for their children.'，省下的词用来展开危害。
- 空喊家长应改变 反面示例：'To solve this problem, parents should change their ideas and pay more attention to their children.' 空泛无内容。改法：'Parents should let their children make age-appropriate decisions and treat mistakes as lessons rather than disasters.'，把'改变观念'落成具体做法。
常见问题
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