2023年12月·第3套英语六级写作 · 题目、范文与解析
本页是 2023年12月英语六级真题第3套 写作 的写作真题页（四六级短文写作）—— 与试卷排版同一卷面：完整写作要求（Directions，词数要求 150–200 词）连续排印 ，卷面下方直接给出参考范文（167 词）与整篇中译、逐段拆解，另附审题立意、谋篇句架与评分自检 。
写作题和范文
本页写作题面、参考范文与逐段解析由懒笔记基于2023年12月·第3套 英语六级写作原卷整理。与试卷排版同一卷面：完整写作要求（Directions，含主题、文体、词数与署名约束）连续排印。写作是生产性任务、无 ABCD 标准答案——题面即整道题；卷面下方直接给出满足全部硬约束的参考范文、整篇中译与逐段拆解。
【参考范文 · 167 词】写作无唯一标准答案，以下为达标示范
With their valuable skills and experience, elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society. Far from being a burden, seniors possess a lifetime of professional knowledge and practical wisdom that younger generations simply have not had time to acquire.
This potential shows itself in countless ways. Take retired engineers and doctors as an example: many of them return to their former posts as consultants, training newcomers and solving problems that puzzle less experienced staff. In my own community, retired teachers volunteer to run free evening classes, while elderly craftsmen pass down traditional skills that would otherwise disappear. Such efforts prove that age brings not decline but a rich resource waiting to be tapped.
Therefore, we should stop regarding old age merely as a time of rest and instead recognize its true worth. If society creates more opportunities for the elderly to share their expertise, everyone benefits. Only by valuing and drawing on their skills and experience can we build a wiser and more harmonious community.
【参考译文】
凭借宝贵的技能与经验，老年人能够继续为社会做出重要贡献。老年人远非负担，他们拥有一生积累的专业知识与实践智慧，而这些是年轻一代还来不及积累的。
这种潜力体现在方方面面。以退休的工程师和医生为例：他们中许多人以顾问身份重返原岗位，培训新人，解决经验不足的员工搞不定的难题。在我自己的社区里，退休教师志愿开办免费夜校，老手艺人则把原本会失传的传统技艺传承下去。这些付出证明，年龄带来的不是衰退，而是一笔有待挖掘的丰厚资源。
因此，我们应当不再把老年仅仅看作歇息的时光，而要认识到它真正的价值。倘若社会为老年人创造更多分享专长的机会，人人都会从中受益。唯有珍视并善用他们的技能与经验，我们才能建成一个更智慧、更和谐的社群。
【第 1 段】照抄首句加对比托举。首句 With their valuable skills and experience... 一字不差照抄，守住硬约束；紧接 Far from being a burden, seniors possess a lifetime of professional knowledge... 用对比句托举论点，落实了'照抄首句加一句托举'的方法与'对比托举观点'句架。
【第 2 段】双例并列回扣中心。主题句 This potential shows itself in countless ways 领起，Take retired engineers and doctors as an example 与 In my own community 两个钩子分别带出职场例和身边例，末句 Such efforts prove that age brings not decline but a rich resource 把例子拉回中心，正是'先主题句再举例收束'的落地。
【第 3 段】推结论并升华呼应。Therefore, we should stop regarding old age merely as a time of rest 由前文推出态度，末句 Only by valuing and drawing on their skills and experience can we build... 用倒装升华并让 skills and experience 重现，与首句首尾呼应，落实'由论点推呼吁再升华'。
这道题到底要写什么、立意是什么
动笔前先钉死本题的核心写作任务与读者语域 ，再定中心立意与要展开的要点 —— 这些是本题特有的内容判断，不是通用套路。
论证老年人凭技能经验贡献社会
本题要写 an essay that begins with the sentence，且首句已给定：老年人凭 valuable skills and experience 能继续为社会做贡献。核心任务不是泛谈尊老，而是论证'为什么/怎样'老年人靠其技能与经验对社会有实实在在的贡献，并用 You can make comments, cite examples or use your personal experiences to develop your essay 三种方式之一把这个论点撑起来。
面向阅卷人的正式书面语
本题是纯议论大作文，没有具体收信人，不需要称呼、落款或书信格式。语域按面向阅卷人的正式书面英语来写：用完整句、正式词汇，避免口语缩略和随意语气，让论证显得客观、有分量。
老人以技能经验持续回馈社会
中心论点就是给定首句：老年人凭借宝贵的技能与经验，能够继续为社会做出重要贡献。全文都为证明这一点服务，紧扣 With their valuable skills and experience, elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society 中的技能、经验与贡献，不滑向养老、孝顺等偏题方向。
- 专业本领返聘再用 第一个要点从职场角度切入：退休的工程师、医生、教师等把多年积累的专业本领带回岗位，做顾问、带新人、解决年轻人处理不了的难题，说明技能没有随退休作废，反而是稀缺资源。
- 阅历传承服务社区 第二个要点从社区与家庭角度切入：老人凭人生阅历做志愿服务、开公益课、传授传统手艺，把经验转化为对身边人的实际帮助，呼应 use your personal experiences to develop your essay 里鼓励的个人经历式论证。
- 社会应正视善用老人价值 第三个要点上升到态度层面：社会不该把老年只当作歇息期，而应创造机会让老人分享专长，善用这笔财富，与首句首尾呼应、把论点收束成呼吁。
怎么分段、每段写什么、能套哪些句架
按写作家族给出现成的段落框架（每段承担什么功能），并为每段配可直接套用的 功能句架（留出填本题内容的空位）。段序与上方参考范文一一对应。
- 第 1 段 照抄首句并点明立场 第一段逐字照抄给定首句作为文章开头，再补一两句解释老年人为何是资源而非负担，把中心论点立稳。
- 第 2 段 举例论证展开分论点 第二段是主体，用 cite examples 与 use your personal experiences 的方式，把'专业返聘''社区传承'两个要点各配具体事例展开，证明技能经验的实际价值。
- 第 3 段 重申升华回扣首句 第三段收束：呼吁社会正视并善用老年人价值，回扣首句，把论点从'能贡献'升华到'社会应善用'。
落点：先照抄 With their valuable skills and experience, elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society，再点明老年人拥有年轻一代来不及积累的专业知识与人生智慧，是可被利用的财富而非社会累赘。
- 对比托举观点 Far from being ___, they possess ___ that ___.（用'远非……而是拥有……'把负面预期翻转成正面价值）
- 补足原因 ___ that younger generations simply have not had time to ___.（用一个 that 从句解释这项优势为何独属老年人）
落点：退休工程师、医生返岗当顾问、带新人、解决难题；社区里退休教师开免费夜校、老手艺人传授濒临失传的技艺。用这两组具体事例呼应 cite examples 与 use your personal experiences to develop your essay，证明年龄带来的不是衰退而是资源。
- 举例过渡 Take ___ as an example: many of them ___.（用'以……为例'把抽象论点落到一群具体的人身上）
- 亲历式补例 In my own community, ___ volunteer to ___, while ___ pass down ___.（用亲身见闻再补一个例子，双例并列增强说服力）
- 例后回扣中心 Such efforts prove that ___ brings not ___ but ___.（用'这些做法证明……'把例子拉回论点、避免脱节）
落点：社会不应把老年只当歇息期，而应创造机会让老人分享专长；唯有正视并善用他们的技能与经验，才能建成更智慧、更和谐的社群，回扣 With their valuable skills and experience, elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society。
- 据证据下结论 Therefore, we should stop ___ and instead recognize ___.（用'因此我们应停止……转而认识到……'从论证推出态度）
- 条件式升华呼吁 Only by ___ can we build ___.（用'唯有……才能……'的倒装把论点拔高成呼吁，句末重现主题词呼应首句）
本题在四个评分维度怎样算达标、容易在哪丢分
按阅卷四维（内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式）给出本题达标要点，并把最容易踩的低分写法摆出来 + 给改法 —— 这是写作版的「狠拆诱人错项」。
- 内容切题 紧扣技能经验贡献 本题达标要点：全篇紧扣 With their valuable skills and experience, elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society，用具体贡献说话；最易失分处是写成空泛的'尊老敬老'或跑到养老、孝顺话题。
- 结构连贯 总分总加钩子词 本题达标要点：首段立论、次段双例、末段呼应，符合 make comments, cite examples or use your personal experiences to develop your essay 的展开逻辑；易失分处是例子和论点之间没有过渡句，读起来像堆砌。
- 语言准确 常用词写准比堆大词强 本题达标要点：contribute to、pass down、draw on 等搭配用准即可显出功底；易失分处是为求'高级'硬造中式表达，如把'做贡献'写成 make devote 之类的错搭。
- 字数格式 卡150到200且首句原样 本题硬约束：正文须落在 You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words 的区间内，且开头逐字照抄给定首句；易失分处是字数越界或把首句改写、漏抄。
- 改写首句致跑题 反面示例：把首句改成 Old people are useful and can help society a lot.（既改写又口语化，丢了 valuable skills and experience 这一核心）。修正：开头一字不改地写 With their valuable skills and experience, elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society. 再展开。
- 只喊重要无例支撑 反面示例：Elderly people are very important. Their experience is valuable. Society needs them very much.（三句同义反复、没有一个例子）。修正：改成 Take retired doctors as an example: many return as consultants and train younger staff. 用具体事例把'重要'坐实。
- 漂到赡养孝顺话题 反面示例：We should respect the old and take good care of them. Children must support their aged parents.（讲的是被赡养，与'凭技能经验贡献社会'相反）。修正：改成 The elderly can give back through their skills, such as mentoring newcomers and passing down traditional crafts. 把重心拉回'贡献'。
常见问题
围绕本题的写作题目与要求、作文类型、立意要点、参考范文、谋篇分段与评分丢分，逐条给出可核对的答案。
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- 2023年12月英语六级真题第3套 写作的中心立意是中心论点就是给定首句：老年人凭借宝贵的技能与经验，能够继续为社会做出重要贡献。全文都为证明这一点服务，紧扣 With their valuable skills and experience, elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society 中的技能、经验与贡献，不滑向养老、孝顺等偏题方向。可展开的要点：第一个要点从职场角度切入：退休的工程师、医生、教师等把多年积累的专业本领带回岗位，做顾问、带新人、解决年轻人处理不了的难题，说明技能没有随退休作废，反而是稀缺资源；第二个要点从社区与家庭角度切入：老人凭人生阅历做志愿服务、开公益课、传授传统手艺，把经验转化为对身边人的实际帮助，呼应 use your personal experiences to develop your essay 里鼓励的个人经历式论证；第三个要点上升到态度层面：社会不该把老年只当作歇息期，而应创造机会让老人分享专长，善用这笔财富，与首句首尾呼应、把论点收束成呼吁。
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- 2023年12月英语六级真题第3套 写作的参考范文（167 词）：With their valuable skills and experience, elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society. Far from being a burden, seniors possess a lifetime of professional knowledge and practical wisdom that younger generations simply have not had time to acquire. This potential shows itself in countless ways. Take retired engineers and doctors as an example: many of them return to their former posts as consultants, training newcomers and solving problems that puzzle less experienced staff. In my own community, retired teachers volunteer to run free evening classes, while elderly craftsmen pass down traditional skills that would otherwise disappear. Such efforts prove that age brings not decline but a rich resource waiting to be tapped. Therefore, we should stop regarding old age merely as a time of rest and instead recognize its true worth. If society creates more opportunities for the elderly to share their expertise, everyone benefits. Only by valuing and drawing on their skills and experience can we build a wiser and more harmonious community.
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- 按内容切题 / 结构连贯 / 语言准确 / 字数格式四维评分，本题达标要点：内容切题——本题达标要点：全篇紧扣 With their valuable skills and experience, elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society，用具体贡献说话；最易失分处是写成空泛的'尊老敬老'或跑到养老、孝顺话题；结构连贯——本题达标要点：首段立论、次段双例、末段呼应，符合 make comments, cite examples or use your personal experiences to develop your essay 的展开逻辑；易失分处是例子和论点之间没有过渡句，读起来像堆砌；语言准确——本题达标要点：contribute to、pass down、draw on 等搭配用准即可显出功底；易失分处是为求'高级'硬造中式表达，如把'做贡献'写成 make devote 之类的错搭；字数格式——本题硬约束：正文须落在 You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words 的区间内，且开头逐字照抄给定首句；易失分处是字数越界或把首句改写、漏抄。 典型低分写法（须避免）：反面示例：把首句改成 Old people are useful and can help society a lot.（既改写又口语化，丢了 valuable skills and experience 这一核心）。修正：开头一字不改地写 With their valuable skills and experience, elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society. 再展开；反面示例：Elderly people are very important. Their experience is valuable. Society needs them very much.（三句同义反复、没有一个例子）。修正：改成 Take retired doctors as an example: many return as consultants and train younger staff. 用具体事例把'重要'坐实；反面示例：We should respect the old and take good care of them. Children must support their aged parents.（讲的是被赡养，与'凭技能经验贡献社会'相反）。修正：改成 The elderly can give back through their skills, such as mentoring newcomers and passing down traditional crafts. 把重心拉回'贡献'。